Sentence of the week.
(Year five are consolidating our sentence writing skills by correcting and improving one sentence throughout the week.)
it is the last day in september
It is the last day in September. (Here we have corrected the basic punctuation.)
It's the last - very cold- day in September. (Now we have included a contraction and parenthesis, using dashes.)
It's the last day in September.(It's getting very cold.) (Here we used brackets to include parenthesis.)
It's the last day in September, the nights are cooler now. (Here we used commas to include parenthesis.)
In a blink of an eye, it's the last day in September, the nights are getting cooler now. (Now we have included a fronted adverbial.)
Well done year five!
Can I write a character profile of Gollum, which includes a range of GPS from year 5?
In a hole lived Gollum, who was as slimy as a snake. With eyes of darkness, he rows his boat, eating goblin and grabbing fish with his bare bruised hands, from the dark still surface of the glassy pond. He lurks around in the dark as a midnight shadow,nobody ever finds him,he cares too much about his special ring,which he doesn't use.The fish is getting strangled by him,and trying to escape,he has two sides of him,and Smeagol is the good one Gollum is the naughty one.He can't control Gollum ,he walks with a bent back and jumps from rock to rock as a midnight shadow. By Tai.
Gollum is boney as a bat,who has pale skin like a polar bear.His eyes are diamonds ,he's evil, demanding ,mysterious,twisted ,determined and alone.He doesn't trust anyone he's very hyperactive and cold blooded.Sitting in his cave all day and night,he is a creature who is ugly and infectious. By Aysha.
Can I write a description of The Shire in the style of Tolkien?
The door on the Hobbit hole is round like a fresh, green pea. The bridge is made of old bricks, which are brown, yellow and stretch across the shiny blue ribbon that flows across the valley.
The mountains are as tall as an angry, green ogre coming out of his swamp.
The shades of green across the land includes: light green grass, that sways on the ground, the tall greenery on the large branch, that flows down on an autumn day, the tall, old mountain standing still like a statue and the small, green bushes, that sway from side to side.
The Hobbit hole can't hold many folks inside unlike a fancy inn, which can hold many folks.
The sun shines brightly on the steep hills surrounding the home of the Hobbit. (It feels like a big hug.)